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Misa's forgettable stories

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Our trip to Houston 

By: Misa 

Our trip to Houston was exciting. The first day, I came to Houston I had to go to a car rental place and it wasn't that fun.  Then my parents were finished .Then we met my grandparents, and their dog Buddy. So the next day all of my my dad's relatives came and we were having fun and my sister, my brother, my cousins, and I went on a slip'n slide it was funtastic.

 

Then summer- days were passing by and I went to my grandma's work and she is a 5th grade teacher in Texas but it was summer brake and so she teached summer school and I made a new friend there and she was very kind but I forgot her name. "When you  with your family it is always fun." (that quote you read was by me).

 

By:Misa

My Trip To Bepu :)

 

When I went to Bebu with my family it was fun!!! I will tell you the story.So we were driving in the car, and my brother, my mom, my sister, and I were playing this Japanese game, and the car was getting a little bit hot so we opened the window in the car.

 

Then, my dad asked my mom were Is the map, but my mom didn't know were it was, and then my brother found It under my mom's chair, and we were close to Bepu.

 

Next, we arrived at Bepu, and it smelled stinky it stincked like a skunk was there, and then we checked in our hotel room, and my brother, my sister, and I were jumping on the beds, and my dad told my brother, sister, and I to get off of the beds so we did, then my family, and I put our kimonos on (kimonos are these tipe of clothes that japanese people wear its kindas like a robe but much more fancier and more decorated) , and we went to dinner, and that was the most funniest  hotel that I have ever been to!!!!!!!

 

Greg and Phil were fishing in the middle of the Lake. Greg suddenly dropped the other oar. When Phil tried to reach for it, he dropped the other one. It was getting dark and they were in deep water but they still wanted to find the oar, so they searched and searched but still no oar. Then this life guard inished with work and he was walking home and he stopped at the lake. So he was looking for fir eflies but he didn't see any so he was just wandering around until he saw Greg and Phil trying to find somthing so the life gaurd went over the other side of the lake to see what Greg and Phil were doing. Suddenly the life guard stepped on something and that something was Greg and Phil's oar, but then Greg and Phil ran to the life guard and they saw that he stepped on their our so they got really mad so they threw oars at the life guard. So then days pasted by and it was finally summer time and Greg told Phil that he wanted to go to the pool so they went and when they were just about to go inside of the pool they saw the life guard that they threw oars at so then he stopped them and said that they were not allowed to go inside of the pool because they threw oars at them and they walked to the Lake, but it was closed so they just layed down and remembered how they used to play in the Lake...........


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Wow that is a realy good story!-Abbi   
I loved the part when you said the summer days are passing by.-Kayla I think you should say grandparents.-Kayla 
The Story is really cool! -Bien   
I would like to visit Bepu but I don't want to leave Japan.alaysha  You spelled skunck wrong it is skunk.Alaysha 
I think you are doing very good on your writing-giselle  You have to fix the word layed-Giselle 
I like your story@_@ jaliyah  You spelles skunck wrong it is spelled like skunk@_@ jaliyah 
I like how you put your words together-Kyarah  You spelled the word funtastic wrong so please respell the word fantastic right -Kyarah
I like the trip to Houston and Bepu. Sean  I think you should put a comma between day and I. Sean
I liked the trip to houston how you got to meet most or all ( I didnt know how much of your family members were there) Corey You put alot of then , also you should tell us what kimonos are. Corey 
I like how you said thats good how you put camas were you need them.  you should not put a lot of then in you story.abbi 
I SEE HOW YOU LIKED THE TRIP TO HOUSTON.JAKAI  YOU SPELLED TECHED WRONG.JAKAI
I really liked your "Trip To Houston" story.-Tatianna(: I think you should add your feelings or emotions on some of your stories!-Tatianna(:
   
   
   

 

 

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